To me a Beacon
student is interesting. Everybody has their own style and opinions.
They don’t get judged for anything that they say or do. We are all
very friendly. Nobody really has any enemies. We all get along. We
are all individuals too, we are our own person and most of us don’t
care what people have to say about us because we have our own
judgment. A Beacon student is also very creative we are based on
three arts and everybody that is in this school is very talented in
what they do.
A Culinary student is what I like to call a "cooktastic", everyone
in culinary learns new things everyday. We create a lot of
different desserts, meals, breakfast things. We are also very
inventive when we are brainstorming things to cook we come up with
some great things. It could be a family tradition or something and
we will try to make it and put it out there for the school to try,
most of the people will voice their opinions, but that is good in a
way because we have to know what the customers like so that we can
give them what they like.
I am a very talented person. I love to cook that is why I am in the
culinary program at school. I like to be in there so i can express
myself in the kitchen. I am also very caring. I care about peoples
problems that is why a lot of my friends like talking to me
because I am a good listener...and I also will give them
my opinion on the situation or I’ll give them advice. My hopes and
dreams are to be a marine biologist....the only thing is
that I don’t think college is for me. Maybe that will change
but for now I am just looking forward to getting out of high
school. I just hope that whatever I choose to do it will be the
right choice for me.
Ended 6:37 pm
15. Michael Skeldon
Kayla-
2nd and 3rd draft not in html format.
Last sentence of Scriptwriting journal includes word “rally.” It should be “really.”
02/25/08, 11:46 am
14. Michael Martins
This draft came out very well. I found maybe two things that i suggested fixing. There just my personal thoughts no vocab corections or anything like that. I can't wait to see how well this movie will come out.
02/13/08, 03:30 pm
13. Michael Martins
I corrected Kayla's secind draft of the script. It realy didn't need that much repair it was just script gramer mostly. The script looks good I hope to see it on the screen soon.
02/01/08, 02:03 pm
12. Michael Martins
This is Michael Martins giving his input on you first draft of your script. We sat down and talked about the basic things I suggested correcting. There wasn’t much for you to fix. I suggested that for the sections of song you wrote in the script be labelled as SONG because they were just random paragraphs in the middle of the page that looked like song lyrics. Also there were a few points wear a character was introduce but the name was not in complete caps. After that there was not much else. I like the story that is being portrayed in the script and I think the audience will under stand it and will be hit emotionally. I have no suggestions story wise because I believe the story is fine. I hope the movie comes out well and I look forward to reading this script again.
01/10/08, 11:23 pm
11. Kyle Schoolcraft
Three paragraphs: I think your capstone is the most personal one. Also, I think by doing it this way will make it a touching film. I don't see any major faults in your paragraphs but try to condense the middle paragraph.
11/09/07, 06:43 pm
10. April Nicholas
Kayla,
I like your paragraphs, and it seems you put a lot of thought into them. I loved how you put detail into every paragraph. Even though you tell us the music in the first paragraph, are you going to have any sound effects or music in the other parts of your film?
11/08/07, 02:22 am
9. April Nicholas
Hi Kayla, How are you? The sentences are good, though they need some work. First, you need to do some rewording....like what is "Her last year..HERE.." describe the word here. Besides that it looks really good.
11/05/07, 02:50 pm
8. Kyle Schoolcraft
Three Sentences:
You have the idea for your capstone and how you want to show it. However, I think you need to add more to that first sentence and I am confused about how you worded the last sentence. I still think this will come out to be a meaningful capstone film.
10/29/07, 05:32 pm
7. Nicollette Forte
This tells just enough to make you want to see the rest of the story, and it seems like a very interesting and personal story. Can't wait to see how it comes out :)
10/17/07, 12:25 am
6. Amber Martin
Your idea seems very interesting and I really can't wait to see the out come, I think that it's going to be very good. Good luck.
10/15/07, 04:58 pm
5. Ashley Gonzalez
I think that this will become a good film cant wait to see it. It is a good idea
10/12/07, 01:45 pm
4. April Nicholas
Kayla, I like how you put some things in there about your dad, I acctualy did not know that happened. Im sorry to hear. So what do you want to do with Marine Biology? What kind of work do you want to do? Are you planning on getting a job before your graduating? I really do like what you are saying in this though. Just those questions pop in my mind.
10/05/07, 01:57 pm
3. Nicole Beaudoin
Wow great job.....That's good that you love to cook.I like waht you say about a culinary student. But maybe you could add more to a Beacon student is.
09/28/07, 06:48 pm
2. Nicole Beaudoin
this is very well thought out. nice job
09/28/07, 02:04 pm
1. Michael Martins
I like it. You are straight and very to the point. However you express what you want the world to know very well. This whole things shops us very well what you think of the school and your self. My question now is does any of it srtike you as a basses for a movie? I think i may see something in not knowing quite yet what you want to do in life after BEACON. Its a great paper.
09/26/07, 06:55 pm